Quantifiable achievements
Showing direct, tangible results like '35% increase in operational efficiency' is a successful strategy. It gives a clear picture of what you achieved and what you might bring to the table. Plus, it's harder to ignore hard facts and numbers.
Initiative and contribution
The phrase 'seeking to contribute' adds a tone of proactivity. It's not about what you want from the job, but what you can offer to the company. As a recruiter, it's a breath of fresh air when job seekers are more focused on giving than receiving.